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The dwarves were kind and helpful. They were hard working and enjoyed helping others. They were also very brave and were willing to stand up to the evil giant.

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As I walked into this giant house, 12 faces stared back at me. I was wet and tired and all I wanted to do was sleep. The dwarves could see that and they all ran over to help me in anyway they could. They made this strange house feel like home.

In the morning when I woke up they were all just watching me, wanting to know my story and help me on my journey back home. They told me stories of how they have helped many lost people in the dark dangerous woods.

Suddenly, there was a loud bang, and we all just in sheer terror. We all ran to the window to see what is was, and in the distance we could see a big, hairy, green giant coming our way. The giant was yelling something but we couldn’t figure out exactly what it was. As it got closer, we realized what it was saying ‘Snow White I eat you!’

‘Isn’t that your name?’ asked one of the dwarves.

I just stood there in pure shock, not an ounce of my body could move. So this is how I am going to die, oh my.

‘Quick! Hide her!’ yelled one of the dwarves.

They grabbed my hands and told me to go down the little trap door and just stay there. So that’s what I did.

I could here all this yelling and screaming, so I thought I would take a little peek at what was going on. So I lifted the lid to the trap door and poked only the top of my head out.

I could see all the dwarves fighting the evil giant. And then it was over, the giant feel to the floor. The dwarves had won! I ran to them and hugged them all. By brave dwarves saved my life.